The winner!!

Before I hit the drum roll and announce the winner of the recent competition, I would need to state my opinion on the participant's story. Starting off with:

1. not_so_lucky_girl

It did give me at least more than 50% of an impact and shock. You have successfully described Amber's personality which I'll give you credit for and it had quite logical chain of events happening but on the down side, Joshua seems a bit too casual about Ever kissing Damian but they way you write and describe the character's emotion totally made me believe that it was happening and I'm almost forget that it was MY story. Compared to last year, you have increasingly improve and I would love it if you continue doing that in the competitions to come!

And now to our NEW first-timer participant!!

2.Lonelyness

How should I say? Well I think you went a bit overboard with Amber's personality. Not that much, just a bit. Your description was too much satisfaction and that I did enjoyed reading it. However, they were some grammar mistakes that was vital since it could lead the reader to misunderstanding a bit to the story line. Another thing is you over-dramatize the story with too much "?!?!?!"or ".....". I understand if you're trying to give a good idea of how the character is feeling but I think you need to control how much you can emphasize. You also lose how you paragraphed them at Part 3. I know you're rushing with writing this story but that not an excuse seeing I gave PLENTY of time. I do give you thumbs up with the story line and your awesome skill of description. I hope to see you improve in the next competition. Gambate!

Now I shall announced the winner for this competition is...* drum roll* ...Last year's winner not_so_lucky_girl!!! She has won two time in a row now and I am still anticipating for someone who can manage to break her chain of victory. So not_so_lucky_girl will get a set of accessories from Hong Kong which includes a ring,necklace and a purse! Again to not_so_lucky_girl, BIG CONGRATULATIONS!!